Sunday, 14 March 2010

in between this

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between ~~~ the~~~ words

among ~~~the~~~ stars

within~~~ the~~~ tiny~~~ movements

aching ~~~in~~~ my~~~ heart



it ~~~is~~~ this

in ~~~almost ~~~silence

that ~~~holds ~~~together~~~ shells,

spheres~~~ of ~~~iridescence

and~~~ incandescent~~~ rays,

that ~~~somehow

cracks~~~ me~~~ open

the ~~~silent~~~ sound~~~ of~~~ which

echoes~~~ as~~~ the~~~ murmur

Between~~~ the~~~ words ~~~to ~~~sit.




In response to murmur this weeks OSI prompt

13 comments:

Loch Rob said...

Thought provoking verse here for me. In between the words can be the silence we listen to.

SandyCarlson said...

Their is power and strength in those spaces like air itself.

mia said...

ohmy julia this poem is simply
gorgeous! a piano playing one
note at a time...adore the form.

anthonynorth said...

Nicely done - and I like the spaces.

Rob said...

Enjoyed this considerably and the form works – thank you for sharing…
…rob
Image & Verse

SisterJulia said...

Thank you everyone! I wanted the spaces very much but blogger didn't want to let me! Glad I persevered :)

SOL said...

I really loved the way you used spacing in this poem--reminiscent of ee cummings.

Stan Ski said...

Great illustration of concentration.

Mojo said...

as a photographer, I learned that when you shoot a subject you shoot the space around it too. and sometimes the space around/between is more evocative than the subject itself.

very much like this verse.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

The space between the words are the most important thing...you expressed this beautifully, and I liked the literal spaces between your words, too. It definitely added to the impact.

Aayushi Mehta said...

Quite lovely! :)

Tumblewords: said...

In the space between thoughts - this is wonderfully written!

gabrielle said...

There is breath in the spaces. Well done.